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Joined: 25 Sep 2005 Posts: 199 Location: Erie, PA

here's a song I just wrote... once i put music to it, it may sound a little like 'come when i call' but a bit more explosive on the guitar... i'll def. be putting some of my other songs i've written in here soon (i have a lot).... but i want people to critique it, praise it, whatever u wanna say about it, say it... i want honest opinions!

You're drifting away, with not much to say.
You're cautiously asleep, dreaming deeper.
The dreams that made her, suddenly disappear.
You wonder what you're here for.
But there's not much to say.

Your heart is sturdy, but your mind is not.
You wish you were ready, right now you're not.
Can you find another girl,
Who'll save your world?

Can you believe your eyes?
You think you're done for.
You failed to fly high.
But you're to begin towards...

(bluesy guitar solo)

Baby I'm over you, yeah I'm through with you.
Please don't try, to make it right.
And if we really are through.
I'll always love you.
But I'll never let you back in,
Once I reach the end.

(another bluesy guitar solo that fades out)

Joined: 25 Sep 2005 Posts: 199 Location: Erie, PA

and by the way, once myspace is back up and working... i have a separate artist myspace (different from the one i already have) here's "my" myspace url
myspace.com/joekraut

people who are friends with me on my normal account add me and whoever else reads this add me! please!!!

heh

peace out...ima go to bed now...